Looking for Feedback

[WinterAlicornGlaciem]

If any-pony could let me know what they think of my story I would be greately thankful

http://ponyfictionarchive.net/viewstory.php?sid=1753

[Starlight Dragon]

I Liked it though i found it was lacking something that would make you want to read more chapters, the first one also lacked what i would feel as proper ending. And i believe some proof reading might have seen this fixed in the first chapter "as fun as hearing our parents talk is, i figured watching grass grow would..." may be edtied to read 'as fun it is to hear our parents talk, I though that watching the grass grow would be a more entertaing way to pass the time'